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The Death Of Abnormally Average; (my stomach is doing flips)
Topic Started: Sep 2 2013, 07:20 (337 Views)
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So this is my introduction to my main project. I think to catch up to whats going on you just have to read the last chapter posted on FFnet since that was a split for being too giangtic. this is weird since you can get a glimpse of how I make myself write. I write chunks of a chapter and connect the scenes. I just lost track with kyle'e speech on how he appreactaites stan since I couldnt write it well enough to my standards. I did have wendys speech but its lost in a newer draft when my memory card crashed. but enjoy.

the way the files saved its spacing my fics weirdly.
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Wendy now found herself on the living room couch next to Bebe and Shelly. She

continued to scrape the polish off her nails, feeling dumb for trying to make small talk

with Stan's friends and now his sister.

Bebe had been uncharchteristcally shy with Shelly at first, until Stan's sister brought up

the great equalizer among women, talking about hot guys. "I agree, Russell Crowe is so

hot."

"Yes, I have all his movies and all the seasons of his tv show." Shelly sighed and fell

back against the couch.

Wendy was trying her best to not roll her eyes. She caught herself and tried to keep her

face expressionless. Who was she to judge the reason she was here was becase of a boy,

her boyfriend. Her stomach fluttered with nervousness wondering when he'd return.

"Wendy loves him too, she has a poster of him in this picture her room." Bebe said

poiting the magazine ethusiatically into Wendy's face who moved back a bit from the

other girls.

Shelly leaned in closer to Wendy. "What your favorite movie from him?"

Fuck Bebe had tried to include her. "Oh, A Beautiful Mind, I guess." If Wendy said

quickly, scooting back any further and she'd toppel over the side of the couch.

"But he was such a pussy in that one, he was much tougher in Gladiator." Bebe whined.

"Well now I understand your taste in men a bit better." Shelly smiled.

Wendy was shrugging off her discomfort with Shelly based on her large braces, but

now she had better reasons. "I guess. Shouldn't you be nicer to your brother, considering

everything?"

Wendy didn't know Shelly very well, but experience was when someone was put on

the spot they had a flicker of honesty that they'd try not to cover up if they were a good

person. Wendy expected Shelly to soften or look sad but Shelly's teeth gritted into a

sneer, showing off even more of the metal in her mouth. "He's so stupid.

Wendy stiffened, on guard if Shelly wanted to lash out. Shelly's general personality

emitted violelnce and maybe she and Bebe better get out of the way. But it had always

been this way for Stan.

The more Wendy was observing and learning about the Marsh family dymanic, well no

wonder Stan was a survivor.

Shelly uttered one last "Stupid turd" under her breath

Wendy saw Stan and Kyle enter the room, she mouthed 'save me' so the other two girls

couldn't see.

"Um, I think my mom needs more help in the kitchen!" Stan said, quickly going towards

the couch.

Finally Wendy saw the softness that should've come naturally from Shelly as she passed

Stan and Kyle on her way up the stairs. "I'm sorry." She said to Stan, her head lowering

and sholders slumping.

"Yeah you better be sorry. Don't talk to any of my friends."

"I'd tell you to start walking to school early but I'm being nice, a luxary you never gave

me. Go." Stan pointed at the stairs.

A series of expressions crossed Shelly's face to the now gathering crowd of Stan's friends.

Shock, puzzlement, anger, and finally sadness as Shelly bent her head submissivly,

shuffling up the stairs.

"Wow you tamed the she beast. Great job."

"Yeah well it took long enough with all I've been put through."

Kyle looked at Stan, wondering how much he knew of that night. "Such as?"

Stan pointed to the stairs. "She threw me down in the basement, she knocked me under

our old huge TV, see that china cabient? My mom's replaced it a few times since Shelly

keeps breaking china over my head. Family heirloom my ass. She always locks me out of

the house."

As if on cue the doorbell rang once again.

"Yeah its Cartman. Wendy I think you should go help my mom in the kitchen."

Wendy stiffened at Stan practically yelling in her face. Normally she's snap right back

when people got too in her face but this was Stan. Maybe the dysfunction of his family

was grating on him, she was ready to leave after a few hours with them.

Stan had been normally sweet and well rounded despite them in the past.

Wendy wouldn't bow her head like Shelly, but jumped up and pulled Bebe by the hand

along with her, slamming the kitchen door, causing an astonished looking Kenny to

finally be pushed into the living room.

The doorbell rang two more times as if the ringer was getting impaitent. "I'm coming!"

Stan yelled as he unlocked the deadbolt.

"It's Cartman isn't it?" Kyle asked, already knowing the answer. He had been dreading

being in the same room with Stan and Cartman for a while.

"Yeah who else would it be?" Stan shrugged as the door opened to not only Cartman but

Butters as well.

Cartman pushed Butters out of way as he caught sight of Wendy's exit. "Ugh you invited

her? Why did I bother coming over anyway?"

"Then go home, fatass." Kyle said starting to shut the door again.

"Hell no, that was pretty hysterical what happened to you in the forest, Stan. I wanted

to see the shitty job they did putting you back together, like there wasn't enough already

wrong with you. The people you hang out with for one thing. Jew, bitch, pussy and poor

kid." Cartman nodded to each of them as Kenny joined the group.

Kyle opened his mouth to throw back 'fatass socioplath' but held back. Stan had been sick

of their fighting. But even worse Cartman could easily spill what actually happened that

night and fuck them all over. But Kyle could hope Cartman didn't want to get himself

into trouble along with the other boys. Kyle didn't even have a decent chance to ask Stan

what he remembered from that night.

Stan narrowed his eyes. "Let's not talk about that, please. Besides, without me you'd have

no one left, except for stupid Butters. Right?"

"Ah whatever, is it time to eat yet?" Cartman grumbled as he made his way into the

livingroom, giving a quick wave to Shelly who was watching from the top of the stairs.

Butters held back, his eyes going back and forth, holding brown paper shopping bag

against his chest. "Yeah you'd have no one left except for stupid me, oh..." Butters looked

down for a moment before smiling again and pulling out a brightly wrapped present

trimmed in ribbon. "I brought this for you."

"You got me a gift? Wow, thanks." Stan said, accepting it and shaking it against his ear.

"I thought I'd give it to you since you had a serious head injury and all. Surprise!" Butters

smiled knowing he could be one of the one to cheer Stan up.

"Don't remind me." Stan went back to the table and waited for the other boys to sit

around him as expected before he ripped open the present. "Wow, Lego Super Heros

Wolverine Chopper Escape? Thanks, Butters, this is really cool."

"Hey Butters, you didn't get me anything for Stan's head injury party."

"Oh well maybe you two can share or something." Butters shrugged as he gather bits of

the wrapping paper Stan had discared.

"You selfish asshole, maybe I'll give you an ass kicking for this party."

"You know this has a Wolverine and a Magneto mini figure, I could give you one?"

"Really?"

"Yeah I could but I won't. Let me fucking enjoy myself."

"God I hate you and Kahl so much."

"The door's right there, fatass."

"I'm not fucking fat anymore. You leave before you get your nasty kosher germs all over

perfectly good bacon."

Kenny was sitting between Cartman and Kyle, looking between the two. He looked over

at Stan who was smirking as he read the back of the Lego box. Would Kenny have to do

this? "Guys shut up. You two are both equally annoying, its why no one else wants to

hang out with us other than Butters."

"I'll bring you a gift tomorrow Eric, I promise."

"Now that's more like it."

"What? I can't believe you'd do that, Butters."

"You want something too, Kyle?"

"Yeah, I want you to have some common fucking sense."

"Do they sell that at Target?" Butters asked.

Wendy and Bebe returned from the kitchen. Wendy had a plate piled high with scrambled

eggs with ham and cheddar cheese mixed in and Bebe had a plate of hash browns. Sharon

was right behind them, setting down a plate with chocolate chip waffles.

"Well everyone dig in. Is everything okay, Stanley?" She bent down and pulled her son

into a one armed hug, and kissing him on the forehead.

Stan frowned and set the Lego box aside. "Except for dad and now you embarassing me?

Yeah this is great."

"Actually Mrs. Marsh, I don't feel like eating waffles today. You got anything else?"

"What else could I make you, Eric?"

"Can you make pancakes instead?"

"Sure, that won't be too much trouble. I have some chocolate batter left over. Anyone else

want panckaes instead?"

"Actually I eat waffles all the time, I wouldn't mind pancakes either."

"All right, five minutes, okay sweetie?" Sharon planted one more kiss on Stan's head

before going back into the kitchen.

So it was okay for Wendy, Kyle and now his hot mom to touch Stan. Maybe it was just

Kenny after all. He shrugged off any annoyance and served himself some eggs, bacon

and potatos. "I bet your mom makes good pancakes."

"You know Kenny you should eat the waffles. My mom makes them way better than

shitty frozen waffles bought with food stamps."

Kenny fork froze mid bite and looked at Stan. "Yeah, well she offered."

"Remember when we had to spend the night at Kenny's house? Not only was that night

terrible but we all got sick after due to our parents totally screwing us. It was your fault as

well, Kenny."

"That was not my fault and if it bugged you that much you shouldn't have come over."

"Spending the night as Kenny's house was one of the worst nights for me as well. At least

your mom provided side dishes, Stan."

"Keep it up, you can't gain back soon enough so I don't have to come up with new

insults." Kyle glared at Cartman but took a sideways glance at Stan, he had to stop his

fighting though it was almost a reflex at this point. "That can't be the worst night of your

life, Stan. We've been though way worse than that."

Sharon came in and placed a second plate of pancakes down right between Cartman and

Kenny. Cartman served himself but Kenny didn't have an appitite anymore, a shame

since he hardly got a nice homecooked breakfast like this. "You know, Stan, despite what

happened you shouldn't be a dick to me."

Kenny regretted lashing out if now Kyle was on his ass.

Butters had taken Wendy's seat next to Stan so Wendy let Bebe take the middle and sat

at the very end across from Cartman. She ate very carefully, observing the fight. She

only ended up in the boys group when she had to fight as well against Cartman, or school

projects for Kyle who wasn't budging on his like for her, Butters was kind to everyone

but not well liked himself. She might have an in with trying to be Kenny's friend, but

knew about his perverted reputation. Maybe she should forget about Stan's stupid friends

and focus on getting some one on one time with her boyfriend.

Bebe poked at her food, chocolate chip waffles were basically a giant chocolate chip

cookie and she was constantly trying to watch her weight. She didn't know this group

well enough to ask for some fruit or something, and it still mystifyed her how mean the

boys were to eachother when they can keep the peace by being catty behind eachother's

backs.

But having things out in the open gave her an idea.

"Instead of fighting why don't we go around the table saying something nice about Stan,

since this meal is for him, including presents."

"You're sweet, and even when you're not trying to be it still shows. You care more than

most and if something is wrong you actually try to do something about it. Its an admirble

trait since I would do the same. Its the main reason I think we go together."

"You know I can never say anything nice to a pussy like you, but out of all the assholes

in this room you piss me off the least. Fuck you Kahl."

"You're really swell like everyone else in this room, like 'ol Kyle."

"Thanks Butters, I think." Kyle nodded back at him.

"You're always telling me to better myself, like how I should stand up to my dad, or not

be a pussy when we go adventuring or not let Cartman talk me into shaving all the hair

off a cats butt and gluing it to my face like a beard."

"What? I seriously don't remember you doing that."

"You don't? We had to talk Butters out of using his mom's nail polish remover to take the

glue off his face."

"No, I don't remember any of that. If Butters was stupid enough to go along with that he

deserved to look that rediculos."

"Oh god, how much don't you remember?"

"Let's not talk about that, I think it's Kenny's turn now."

Kenny didn't want to have to do this. Not that he didn't care about Stan, but he wasn't that

good expressing himself verbally, espcally when put on the spot. What could he come up

with, what would he like to hear if he was normal like Stan?

"You're a lot more resiliant than I or anyone would give you credit for."

"That's it? What the hell is that even supposed to mean?"

"It means a lot, especally coming from me. Sorry if you're not getting it."

"How can you say that after all that Stan's been through, you're the one being a dick."

"Yeah you tell him, Kahl."

Kenny sighed and pushed his plate away, not willing to fight. He looked at Stan

wondering what he thought. Stan gave another small smirk before taking another bite of

his food.

Wendy finally had an in on the conversation, though not what she wanted. "I don't think

Kenny meant it that way, it was a misguided complement."
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This chapter was supposed to end with kenny being annoyed with getting shunned by his group and wendy being sympathetic to kenny but going along with stan as well. it should be more apparent how I fucked up stan's personality after the accident but if you can't guess I'll post what was supposed to happen next.

I know there was supposed to be a part in between this and what's to come of stan's first day back to school and everyone fawning over him. he gets extra credit in school, excused form homewor,, everyone wants to talk and sti with him. blah blah.
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Kenny held the sleeve of Kyle's jacket by the elbow, working his way back from the rest

of the group. Usually stubborn ass Kyle would be fighting the whole way but Kenny felt

as if he were leading a stray puppy behind him. Past the back gate to the school was the

vast forest that surrounded the town. On the surface calm and pretty from the trees and

snow. But then again lots of teribble things had happened in these pretty snow covered

forest.

When the school was out of sight Kenny finally stopped walking

"What would you have done in my situation?"

"If Stan was meant to die it was what was meant to happen. You shouldn't have fucked it

up."

"How can you say that?"

"You wouldn't understand."

"No you don't understand, Kenny.

"For fuck's sake you still have me, though I'm not quite as good as Stan in your eyes. But

there is something more you haven't considered. Simply standing on your own. It's hard

to get used to but it can be done."

"Thank you Polly Prissy Pants. And how are you enjoying your tea, Stan?"

Stan sat cross-legged at the opposite end of the table in Cartman's room. Between them

was a collection of stuffed animals each lined up along both sides of the table, a full

cup of tea in front of them. Stan also had a cup in front of him. There was a sugar bowl

in front of him, and at Cartman's urging he kept adding it to his cup. Three heaping

spoonfuls later Stan took a drink, spit it back in the cup and pushed it away from

himself. "How can you drink this shit?"

"Everyone else likes it." Cartman said, gesturing out to the rest of the plushies around the

table.

"Right.

"You can't get everything you want, Stan."

"Oh yeah? Watch me." Stan got up and opened Cartman's closet door, shuffling through

clothes and toys, rasing an eyebrow as a few high heeled shoes and girls clothes fell out

of the mess. "And you caled Butters a faggot?"

"What the hell are you doing?"

"Getting my payment." Stan grabbed the Mission Impossible Breaking And Entering

Playset and tucked it under his arm. "I think I deserve this more than you ever did, if

anything I actually fit into the clothes it came with."

"You cocky son of a bitch. I'm onto you, you remember way more than you're letting on."

"No one would suspect manupilation from a pussy like you either. It's unque though this

could be useful."

"Useful to who?"

"To both of us. You never thought to use your pussy power to get whatever you want?"

Butters returned to the room with a mug of hot cocoa. He carefully placed it down and

blew on his hands, it was hot and Butters hadn't grabbed a pot holder. Stan looked at

Cartman from across the table then back at Butters."This isn't good enough."

"How can I make it better, Stan?"

"I need marshmallows, lots of them. Not these little sissy marshmallows that came in the

cocoa packaage. I want you to go through all the cereal in the kitchen, pick out all the

marshmallows and only give me the ones that are yellow and blue."

"Sure sure, anything else."

"Yeah, if you're already looking like a fag why don't you grab a pair of Cartman's mom's

highheels and wear them for the rest of the day."

Butters hurried over to the closet and shook off his own shoes before sliding into a pair

of highheels. He took tiny steps over to the table again as he unsteadily picked up Stan's

cocoa and headed back out to the kichen.

Both boys watched, Stan waited until Butters was mostly out of ear shot before leaning

over to Cartman. "I can't believe him sometimes."

"Hey Butters, I'm

Butters spoke up from the hall as his boyshoes wearing ankles gave away and he fell

down the stairs.

Instead of checking to see if he was okay Stan joined in with Cartman now laughing

hysterically at Butters. "Oh sorry, hey Butters I'm still waiting. Orange and green

marshmallows okay?"

"Yes, yes Stan. Whatever you want." Butters groaned as he painfully pushed himself up

to clean up the mess he made.

Cartman took a deep breath and wiped tears from his eyes. "That was beautiful. It feels

good to fuck with people like that."

"Yeah but that's Butters. He did whatever I told him before...all this."

"Yeah but what if you could have more? Having anyone at your beck and call. I have my

grips on certain people but you could get away with more."

Stan "How so."

"Everyone expects this stuff from me. You have an unassuming personality, likeabiliy

with everyone and a near death experience on your side. If you put your pussy power to

use who knows what we could get away with?"

"You are so goddamn unintentionally gay sometimes. But I like where you're going with

this. You think you control everyone but I actually can. That means we only go after

people who deserve it. Kyle is to remain unharmed, he is my best friend and probably

would die without me.

"Well that doesn't leave me much room to fuck with people."

"Kenny's been annoying the fuck out of me since all this happened.

"Well it's not like he's dead or anything."

"Yeah since nothing's worse than death." Kenny tried to keep the bitterness out of his

voice. In all honesty who was he to judge since he knew how much dying could take

out of you. But Kyle and Cartman had been equally shitty judges on that, especally with

dealing with a freak like Dr. Mephesto.

(I'll post the rest of what the entire novel was supposed to be when it comes to me. its been so long and I cringe at this stuff and am not even bothering to reread it.)
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This looks good Ama , it seems like that Stan is going to take advantage of everyone around him by playing up the hurt card, so this is where it is going to get interesting. LOL I wonder what is going to happen now, what will he do, I bet he will make everyone do everything for him. I cannot wait, good job Amanda.
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when mephesto was supposed to save stan Kyle told him no animal splicing so mephesto used the fat from cartmans liposuction which results in stan having a more subtle personality of Eric carton meaning he could get away with more since everyone likes stan and he's unassuming. no one could really pin point his exact personality in the beginning of the fic beginning anyway. :P
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Too bad that AA is not going to be completed(since I already translated the first chapter, but I lost it) :(
But thank you, for sharing the sketches of the next chapters :)
If you want I can help you, but it will be a little, since muy exams starts this Friday :(
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So um, my plans for the upcoming chapters are the group is spit with cartman and newly evil stan planning evil schemes. right now on a small level collecting money to save animals we they're trying to make ten million dollars. butters plays bitch boy to both stan and cartman.

while stan and cartman are lying ironically kenny and Kyle decide to break into dr mephestos lab ti get proof since Kyle refuses to believe his best friend is evil (i wanted to call this chapter "the only sane man" since all the chapter titles were aspects of stan- goddamn i used to be obsessed with south park)

after kenny is proven right the boys find Kevin, the little moneky boy and they see he needs care. thy feed him and clean up the lab. as they're leaving with the promise to Kevin they'll come back thy boys see both injured glimmer corp test animals starving and freezing in the woods as well as mutated spliced animals from the lab and realize they have a bigger problem on their hands to try and keep them in a safe place.

so Kyle and kennys task is to round up the animals and feel and care for them in mephestos lab/zoo.

i have more but i have to remember what was to happen next.
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I know another aspect of the fic was Sharon was supposed to turn into another liane with get bending over backwards for stans every demand. shelly is also being submissive to stan and grandpa is proud of him.

randy remains in denial about his worry getting more and more obsessed with his camping obsession. he means well and keeps asking stan to have a father/son camping trip with no technology and they just survive. evil stan mostly shrugs him off. he has other plan with Wendy.

more plot points as i think about them. ill link this to my ffnet profile next time im online.
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Let's all make threads with the titles referencing the show!

HOW exactly did Stan tame Shelly? Cartman didn't manage to do it. Butters is so entertaining in this one... It makes me forget about all the business with Stan's personality change. Eat ur waffles, Stanley. We have a meme on our hands... Everyone's a dick to Kenny and he's the only one to realise there's something wrong with Stan... Wendy and Kyle shrug it off because they're too worried about him.

Kyle and Kenny's dialogue is a reference to John's rant about Kyle having no independent use in the show, right? And I got it, yay... "Use your pussy power" ^^ Stan learning about using manipulation was a good scene, pity AA won't be finished. Was Kenny's line at the end a cut back to Kyle and Kenny? That was kind of confusing.

Edited by Wensleydale, Sep 24 2013, 09:48.
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